Thursday, August 26, 2010

The Lastoc of the Annumpi: Surveying the Damage (Part 12)

Part 12

6 comments:

  1. That took a turn I never saw coming.

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  2. Did the surprise work? Was it surprising, but plausible?

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  3. Oh, yeah. Apparently Ms. O'Brien was not smoking a clay pipe. Absolutely no smoking by Mrs. O'Brien. Ever. I don't how that got in there. Must have been a virus.

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  4. It was quite plausible but it might have been nice to have some throwaway comments in earlier conversations to hint at the larger situation.

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  5. Good advice. That's one problem with having only a sketchy plan as guide. Makes foreshadowing difficult. Consider this a very first draft.

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